Draft 1

Please be aware I am struggling with this paper!! It is DEFINITELY not finished..This is what I have for my first draft. Sorry. I find this movie extremely hard to write about.




Brooke McNulty
Mrs. Evans
English 103
December 2, 2009
Confusion
The movie “2001 A Space Odyssey” directed by Stanley Kubrick is a movie filmed in 1968. The movie starts off showing a group of apes doing various things, such as eating, jumping around, and fight with one another. Further into these scenes with the apes, a black object appears and the apes go crazy. The movie then progressed into actual people interacting. Two men go into space on a mission, and there is also a really advanced computer that speaks to them during the trip and controls everything. The movie contains a lot of music and visuals. Besides the middle of the film where people are involved, this movie had very little dialogue.
After viewing this film, I have to be honest I do not fully understand the meaning behind it. The apes, the black object, and the ending of this film were rather confusing. I am sure there is symbolism behind these random scenes but I just do not see it. The movie is very dragged out; by this I mean some of the scenes that were twenty minutes long could have been cut down to five minutes. “Watching this film demands two qualities that are sadly lacking in all but the most mature and sophisticated audiences: patience and a willingness to ponder the meaning of what's transpiring on screen. 2001 is awe inspiring, but it is most definitely not a "thrill ride." It is art, it is a statement, and it is indisputably a cinematic classic” (Berardinelli). This quote is from a written review of “2001 A Space Odyssey” by James Berardinelli. I could not agree more that patience and willingness to understand is definitely a key component when watching the film. Is it art? I think maybe this is what the director is trying to bring to the film.
The interesting part about the movie is how realistic the special effects were and the ideas the author had thought of that were not relevant during the sixties. The images of space and planets looked very realistic, along with the space units the men traveled in. I thought the special effects looked really good, especially for a time when technology was not very advanced. The idea of video chat and visual security in a few of the scenes in the film were interesting. Webcam chatting was not heard of during this period of time, and I found it odd, but interesting how it was shown in the movie that way.













Work Cited
Berardinelli, James. "Review: 2001: A Space Odyssey." Reelviews Movie Reviews. 2000. Web. 03 Dec.
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Group Project Blog #2

Our project is going very good. We have met in the library outside of class several times. Our website looks nice so far. I am curious how it will turn out when we publish it. I am having an issue however on how everyone is working equally. I don't feel like one of my partners is doing his fair share. Oh well though. He has done some work. I just feel like I have done a lot more than I should have to.

Group Project Blog #1

So we are doing this group project, fun fun. My group is doing a website on credit card risk, dangers, and debt. It should be pretty interesting, we don't have a lot done yet. We finished the group report and found plenty of websites and a few humorous videos. Thomas started on some of the creation of the website but it is nowhere near done or half way done. We met up outside of class and got to work some more. Hopefully after fall break, we can meet up few more times outside class and get some more done!

Norton Field Guide to Writing ( 453-484)


Starting off reading this section, mostly on pages 253-255, there was some ideas about fonts and headings. It just reminded me for some reason about fonts, and how we are suppose to use them. I remember anytime I wrote a paper middle school through high school, and even now, teachers were strict about fonts. I understand the font size rules. Obviously you do not want a student making there text a large font to reach the length requirements. However, I do not understand why we always use Times New Roman, size 11 or 12 font. What is so special about this size and this style of font. Who picked this font to be standardized? I have always wondered this. I think I might look up on it.

Safety

• (p.243)

I think Andy McDonie has a very good point in his introduction paragraph of "Airport Security: What Price Safety?" He not only has good point, but it is a very good transition into what his topic is. The topic is Airport Safety, and I am guessing the importance of safety in general. There is a good point about all the things we spend money on for safety and that it is obvious it is important to us. His opening paragraph personally drew me in and I might look up the rest of the writing.

Blog #8!!

Cause and Effect is something I never really understood. I would think I finally got it but when I tried to determine the cause and effect, it felt impossible. They did a good job of explaining how it works.

I thought the quote from "The Onion, "All Seven Deadly.." was pretty funny. It was a good quote to put in that section. Classifying and dividing are very similar things. It's basically putting the text in groups or topics in sections. For example with classifying, you could put the certain languages in a group. And with dividing, you are dividing the text into parts or groups. It is sort of the same process.

Strategies

Reading strategies (313-328)

I think this reading was definitely scheduled for September 24 on purpose. It is about reading strategies like "Playing the believing and doubting game", summarizing, analyzing the argument, and considering larger text. With our first drafts due on Tuesday, this could be very helpful. We are writing about someone's paper and arguments. We are analyzing the text and stating the things we disagree and agree with. This reading tells us how to go about this paper and what things to look out for.

C&W vs Rap

518-523 - Parallel Worlds

I found this reading not only hilarious, but surprisingly true. I have read many articles and papers on this subject but this one was really good. The author shared many details and examples, such as lyrics and titles on songs. The way the author compared the two genres of music was very interesting. I honestly looked at it and was thinking "Oh my gosh, another long reading." But I'm glad I read it. It was funny to see the similarities between two completely opposite types of music and lifestyle.

Proofreading

• Editing and Proofreading (p.219-223) Norton Field Guide to Writing

As you can see in this reading, there are a million things to do when editing a paper. But the most important in my opinion would be proofreading. The last but not least important thing is proofreading. As the book says, you must slow down when proofreading your paper. If you go too fast or skim through you will not catch all the mistakes. You can't just read the paper either. You have to read the words like this reading explains. I strongly agree with this. If your just reading to see if it makes sense, you will miss spelling and grammar errors. Another great way to proofread is to have someone else do it. Having someone else read over your paper is good because they will catch the things you missed.

Titles,beginnings, and endings

• Getting Respone and Revising (pg. 213-214)

I don't exactly agree on the part about titles. It says to recognize if it grabs your attention or is it interesting. Well I have always been taught to not judge a book, or in this case a paper, by its cover, or in this case its title. It could be the most boring paper in the world but have a really catchy title. On the other hand it could be an awesome paper and have a boring, dull title. The part that really matters is the first few sentences to a paper or book. Those first few sentences or even first paragraph has to grab a readers attention. If it does not, readers will not read much further than that. The ending is also important. The author must make sure whatever his or her point is made by the end. If a reader is interested and reads the whole paper but the end is horrible, they will be disappointed. They will not have good things to say about your paper simply because of how it ended. So I would say to worry about the beginning and ending sentences more than a title. Recognize how most readers are going to go about reading your paper. :)

Something to think about..

"Remember that your writing is not carved in stone." That quote is from the Norton Guide to Writing book for English 103. I like this saying. I find myself continually struggling for things to say and how to put those things on paper. I over think everything. I take rough drafts way too seriously. Although drafts are important in the process of writing, they are mostly a learning tool. You use first and second drafts to figure out everything you want to say and how to say it correctly. You correct grammar errors and such also. As I put my thoughts together to begin a rough draft I need to remember this quote. It is true. Writing is never carved in stone, so I shouldn't over react. I will slow down, write what I think I want to, and relax. I can always go back and fix things. I could even go back, deleted the whole thing, and start over. My options are open when beginning a paper ahead of the deadline.

Stories I found interesting and THEN SOME...

Reading & Blog Entry 2: Norton Field Guide:Literacy Narratives (487-517); Chapter 22, Generating Ideas and Text (199-204)

• Se Habla Espanol by Tanya Barrientos

Although I am not Latina, I find the Hispanic culture very exciting. I would kill to speak Spanish or have a Spanish/Hispanic hertiage and background. I think Tanya should of kept embracing her hertiage, as well as her language, when she came to America. Like she mentioned America wasn't the same back then but I wouldn't have cared. I would of enjoyed being different than the average person in America. I would have loved having something most did not, that is, being bilingual.

• Learning to Read by Frederick Douglas

I have read something like this story before about a slave who learned to read and write. It spoke about how the white man could take everything away from them, except their education. They could not remove education from someones mind. That is interesting to me. A quote I liked from this reading was, "This bread I used to bestow upon the hungry little urchins, who, in return, would give me that more valuable bread of knowledge." I love that quote. I love that someone like this man in such an awful situation can see good. He was able to make things better in spite of his circumstances. This story was sad but inspiring also.

• Mother Tongue by Amy Tan

I found this reading extremely interesting. I love hearing cultural stories like this one. The word for word part in her mothers way of speaking was interesting as well. I could not understand half of it but I found it intriguing. The difference of how she would tell a story was weird. I also found it interesting that the author, Amy, had so many different ways of speaking English. I totally agree on the way English tests are. Although I do not have too many ways of speaking, I feel the same as her. In math, it is easy because there is only one correct answer most of the time. And as she said, on English tests, it is almost like a judgement call. There are so many different opinions on things. It is hard to establish or limit yourself to one 'correct' answer. I always found this difficult.

• Generating Ideas & Text

I've never heard this vocabulary to describe ways of generating ideas and text. I definitely find myself doing some of these though. I find myself looping a lot of the time. I write a group of things, read over it, and begin again bringing along those ideas. I also think I am good at free writing. Journals are something I have always been good at in high school English classes. Teachers give you a topic, and you just write about it. I can write a page or so off of most topics. I also think questioning is a good way of finding your thoughts and opinions. I do not practice this much, but I should. I hate the idea of listing, outlining, and clustering. Listing and outlining are way too organized for my taste. And at the same time, clustering is too unorganized for my taste. Clustering is just that, cluster.

Overall I liked this section of reading. Some of the stories were boring, which is why I did not choose to comment on those.

My thoughts about the reading!

I liked how the book went through those five or six categories of preparing to write a paper. Each chapter provided details and examples on the subject at hand. The examples or excerpts definitely helped me understand a little better.
I really enjoyed the literacy narratives. I think the writing about the man and his sick father was touching. A lot of people can relate to the way he was feeling. Whether it be someone who grew up in a single parent home or just a poor childhood, most can hit home with that specific story. I loved how he enabled himself to suck up his pride and anger to enjoy the last moments he has with his father.
The second story almost made me cry at the end. The fact that his grandmother tried so hard and put so much effort into helping him enjoy education was amazing. He realized that later on in life. She had so much motivation to helping him succeed, and he actually recognized it as well as acted on it. I found this extremely sweet.
Last but not least, I found I could most relate to the third literacy narrative. It wasn't as an intriguing story as the other two, but it hit home for me. I felt the same way when I received an awful score on the writing portion of the SAT. I always loved writing, and it was somewhat of a hobby. I was on the school paper for 2 years and thought I was pretty good at it. When I got those results, I was bothered and shocked. It made me realize I had a lot of work to do. I felt the irritation in the authors words.
These chapters did a good job of explaining how to start thinking on what to write and how to go about it or put it together. This was helpful.

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